Talk:Miyu LaNeko/@comment-5715831-20121201065642

As i am a HORRIFICALLY slow reader i finally made my way through this fully, like i said before, she`s a cute character! But she does have some major flaws here and there. Now i`m  not saying this to hurt your feelings, but she comes off a bit mary sue..ish per say.

First things first.

That is not lolita. Lolita isn`t BRIGHT COLOURS or extremely short, lolita is very Innocent, and the colours you`ve chosen make even less sense because you wanted gothic lolita. Gothic lolita is a deeper version of any colour, it is NEVER bright or neon. And the dress you`ve used is too short! lolita is never that short, the shortest i`ve seen a real lolita dress go is  three inches below the knees.

Now moving on to her. The whole half normie half monster thing needs to be dealed with. I understand you want to make her unique, but it just seems stupid. I`m just guessing here but is she like, a monsterized version of yourself? (if not dont yell at me this is usually why i see a lot of weeboo ocs on this site.) Last thing with this are, Why is she african american? Bakeneko's are Japanese, so shouldn't she be Japanese??? (don't you pull that "oh but her dad was African american" stuff on me, this is unacceptable. no offence)

And finally her hair. Now its not so much the style, its the changing colours to match her outfit, now i am very well versed in various countries mythologies, i don't recall the bakeneko being able to change its colour. So i'm not sure why that is there, maybe if she died her hair temporarily to match her outfit that would make so much more sense.

Now i apologize if i hurt your feelings or insulted you in anyway (though i shouldn't have?) but when i finished reading her whole thing fully i kinda wanted to cry (okay there is the insult my apologizes.) Your a sweet girl with lots of talent! i just want to see good work coming from you instead of some half assed (pardon the language) mary sue that makes no sense in several areas.

yeah this is going to bite me in the butt later, but i just wanted to inform you.